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Published: 2009-09-11 20:27:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 178; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 12
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PLEASE HELP!!
I have been working on this lineart for a while and I am stuck! Something is wrong with the proportions or the hair or something and I cannot figure out how to fix it. I would really appreciate all of your input, cricism, comments, etc. Tell me what you think!
I have included a flipped version so that all you wonderful people can hopefully see what is wrong
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Do NOT use this lineart for your own purposes!! It is a work in progress and may soon be available for coloring etc.
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yes, i agree with Raikoh067. probably what is making you see something wrong is that the abdomen is thin. overall it is great, but if i were looking for a flaw that's probably what's off. i dunno if you finished it yet, but thats my thought. you could leave it as is if you're looking for a character that's tall and skinny.
however it works out i like and please continue to improve.
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Her elbow is a little flat, and it is shown more so by the hand gripping her arm; it's gripping it a little to tight, like its more flat then it should be. Think about the angle that her fingers to her hand is creating.
And yeah, her head could be shrunk a teeny, tiny bit. I mean, very subtle, very small size change, and in doing so, bring it down on the neck a teeny tiny bit. When I say these, I really do mean slightly. It can be very easy to do it too much.
I'm not sure if the stomach is that small because of the style (see my "Music Girl" for what I mean), or if its just a problem. If the latter, try bringing her lower back out a little bit, and see if that changes anything you noticed to be "off".
Hope that helps!
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actually, nvm, dont change the head. once you move the back out, it should fix the head looking wrong.
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Thanks so much for the suggestions!! I think that the back thing might work, and your right about the hand! I honestly haven't seen this in so long that I almost forgot what it looked like!! 
Summer is here though so maybe I will be able to finish it....
P.S. I love your icon!! I just finished Toradora last month.
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i think her head is little bit too big imo and her stomach need a little bit volume
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Got it. I never thought of the stomach thing before, thanks so much for pointing it out. I want to have this posted soon... just gotta get off my lazy tookus.
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the hair could come out in front of the head a little more. i mean like a tiny bit further out from the forehead, otherwise it's awesome
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AH! Thanks so much! I think I have fixed that on my new version 
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oh, great
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personally the only thing i can think of is that the nose is kinda big. other than that i say well done!
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Hmmmmm...Let me see what I can do
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