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Java027 — Getting to Old For This
Published: 2006-06-29 20:24:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 73; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description We Push open Doors lost to long
Ago from when they used to seem to
Farmiliar to us.
Now Just the remnants of our long
Forgotten story,began so long ago,
(Will it end very soon?)
We have to push the doors open now,
When younger the doors to our imagination
Where left open for us, Now just a figure of speech.
To many poems written, all faded out now.
We now have to reach harder for the words
We're trying to grasp to describe on how to
Tell people our deepest wishes and desires.

To laboured and tired to even care anymore,
On how people will see me in the next few years.
Hurt from long ago, It still hurts, Memories, So long and Farewell.
(Written poems on that too)
Just wishing memories would leave us that fast, sometimes
I think it would be better not to remember.
Now straining even harder to open the doors that
Will lead us to the future reality, this sad thing I call my life.
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Comments: 6

airmega23 [2006-07-09 21:15:53 +0000 UTC]

Good job with the emotion here, and since you are only 15 that is the mainthing to worry about right now, expressing yourself. I would suggest that you look to improve your technique, grammar and puncuation may not be taught as much in poetry as they are in prose, but they are equally (if not more) important.

Bravo!
Greg

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Java027 In reply to airmega23 [2006-07-16 14:27:20 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I'll try to remeber to double check

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airmega23 In reply to Java027 [2006-07-16 21:16:33 +0000 UTC]

Not a problem! Hope you can check out my work too!

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xzumalcken [2006-06-30 21:46:46 +0000 UTC]

nice work,feel the same sometimes,then I take the balogna out of my shoe

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Java027 In reply to xzumalcken [2006-07-01 18:51:52 +0000 UTC]

Lol

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Scorpion-Heiress [2006-06-30 01:46:56 +0000 UTC]

This is really good!!

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