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Random shots from this one: [link]Edit: Changed 4th image's dialog from
"Look at all these homeworks. They got "Copy Paste" written all over them."
to
"Look at all of these homework. They have "Copy Paste" written all over them."
Thanks for the suggestions.
I swear, there are millions of grammatical errors to be seen in the game.
Edit2:
Changed the dialog again as suggested.
This just proves I fail at English. Maybe I should consider hiring an editor...
...
Or rather not. Hiring doesn't sound reasonable considering that this was meant to be a small project to be released for free...
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I'd be happy to fix your grammar, if you need. Also, it's "Look at all this homework."
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"All of this homework" is actually grammatically correct, though a lot of people would say "all this homework", so either's fine I think.
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just who the hell was that hooded girl that whipped ceil's d###?!
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that's part of the secret film ending (one of my faves).
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I'm a grammar nazi. I'll do it for free.
And the horse whip seems like it'll lead to something erotic..
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Nobody' perfect ... errors are made to be done. 
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The slight engrish gives it an endearing foreign quality.
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Oh wow a VN?
By MI?
My body will never be ready. DO IT.
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Just love how all the ictures are just casual and it gets to the teacher and its like..... *scrolls down slowly with herp derp face*
but very cool - I think the first and the last are my favourite
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"There she is, Iris. The girl I've bin ---> stalking <--- for ages." <-- that's epic i wanna know who said this xD
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"she took a horse whip from a nearby table"
My body is ready....
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Like this? [link]
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Editor? Well I'd be glad to do as much as I could for free, I am a bit of a grammer Nazi. Obviously I want SOMETHING in exchange, but as a fan of your art and the concept so far I wouldn't want much. More like I'd just like you to be grateful to me since you're all amazing and all, and I may want to request a pic for a game of my own and I'd like to at least be heard out
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Awesome sauce! But I cant help wonder...last panel horse whip? I see what you did thar~
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I am so excited for this xDD
I'd be willing to be an editor for free hgdjfklgshd coughcough;;
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I volunteer to help you with English for free as well-- example: "Look at all these papers! They have "copy paste" written all over them!" or "Look at this homework! It has "copy paste" written all over it." You can't really make homework plural that you want to. If you use the term "homework" you'll have to use singular terms.
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"This just proves I fail at English. Maybe I should consider hiring an editor...
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Or rather not. Hiring doesn't sound reasonable considering that this was meant to be a small project to be released for free..."
Being american born and a fairly decent writer I would gladly help you with editing for free. Problems with this are as follows:
1) this would never happen because you probably weren't serious.
2) Idk how to work ren'py
If both these problems could be solved, I would be glad to devote atleast 3-5 hours a day on such a wondeful project
(I'm sure many people volunteered already)
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I lol'ed when I saw Cerise, then after that, Carmine. 'Cause they're names of characters in my story XD
Awesome works! ♥
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"Look at all of these homework. They have 'Copy Paste' written all over them" is still incorrect. It's "Look at all of this homework. It has 'copy paste' written all over it." (Homework is a singular noun, you see.)
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if I had a teacher like that, I would prefer to be home schooled.
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I wonder how teachers in anime always end up with huge boobs. Interesting/Disturbing trend.
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Wow I don't think I've ever met a teacher with breasts like that before XD gotta admit it would've made high school a bit more fun though lmfao XD
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im the last panel is...urm interesting or confusing should we say?
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your sentence doesn't sound natural
try this:
Look at all of this homework. It's got "copy paste" written all over it
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dami gusto magedit tsing
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If you need an editor, just call. I'm actually editing a dating sim for an Austrian and a collection of short stories for a self published author. Of course, I'm not exactly a professional, but hey, at least I'm cheaper. lol.
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I do believe I could do some editing suggestions for free C:
It's just a matter of contact info and such :<
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Sorry to bring this up, but to be grammatically correct it should be:
"Look at all of this homework. It has "Copy Paste" written all over it."
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"There she is. Iris. The girl I've been stalking for ages." Oh no. That certainly doesn't scream hentai game. Not at all.
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Oh! Or you can change "it's" to "they've" and it would make sense.
"It's got copy paste written all over it."
"They've got copy paste written all over them."
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I'm sure plenty of people would edit for free, babe. You're pretty popular. Also instead of "It's got copy paste written all over them" it should be "it's gotten copy paste written all over it." Because even though you're talking about multiple pages of homework you didn't use the plural for homework, so you shouldn't use the word "them." Sorry, kind of confusing;; Basically it disrupts the flow if one of the words is plural and the other isn't.
Keep these comin! I'm super excited for this game.
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Well, if you want an editor, I wouldn't mind volunteering for free! The game looks like it would be really awesome when it comes out
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OOhhh, Isn't the right sentence ; Look at all this homework. ?
I love your drawings .. Don't want to make u feel bad ; _ ;
u rock .. on IMVU too <3
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