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Obi-quiet — Deception
Published: 2004-12-03 05:43:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 3186; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 73
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Okay, I am revising this story...mostly because it needed to be revised so horribly. shudder Anywway, I will place a note at the beginning of every chapter I revise, and I hope those of you who are reading like it. I hope those of you who are re-reading like i tmore.

Thanks!

Rated PG for some themes and violence.

oOo

“Get outta here, kid!” a harsh voice growled, pulling Danny out of his doze and back into the real world. It was a shame, really. The dream had been safe, and warm. More than a little annoyed, he mustered what anger he could and shot the homeless, bearded man that stood before him a glare. It was more than enough to get the man to back off for a few seconds while 15-year-old Danny Fenton stood calmly and brushed himself off.

“Whatever,” he muttered , half to himself, half to the other guy.

Back to aimlessly wondering the streets of New York, Danny thought wryly to himself, and stepped from the relative protection of the alley he'd been in onto the windswept street with a sigh.

As soon as he turned the corner, the look of annoyance fell, depression working across his face. He no longer had the energy to keep any mask up when he knew no one else would even give him a second thought. Everything in the last three months had happened so fast, that he could barely remember...and yet, time had seemed to crawl along at the same time. He looked down at his torn and dirty t-shirt, visible through the jacket in a much similar condition. He couldn't afford a new one, let alone a decent meal or a place to stay. So he could only wander.

He passed a bakery, and tried desperately to ignore the aromas that drifted out, mocking his hunger. He hurried past the welcome sign snorting at it. No one wanted him, and why would they? To those he had been closest to, he was a freak, and to every one else...well, most people seemed to be able to sense something off about him.

For a moment, he found himself tempted to reach through the glass and grab something, but shook the thought from his head almost immediately and hurried on. He hadn't stooped to stealing yet, and he wouldn't. Ever.

The cinnamon and yeast smells followed him down the street, teasing his nose and making his eyes water slightly. They reminded him of home...not that he could call that place his home any more.

How had everything gone so wrong? He wondered to himself for the billionth time. There were times he wondered if Johnny 13 wasn't permanently following him at a distance so his ghost sense couldn't pick him up. Danny had most certainly seemed to pick up his own bad-luck shadow. He shivered. He'd been living out like this for how long? He'd lost track. It seemed like years and yet days at once. He'd long since lost all track of time since his birthday. He'd turned 15 here...away from his friends and family...

He automatically snickered sarcastically at that thought. What friends? What family? He had no one.

As he turned the corner, he shoved his torn, mis-matched gloved hands in his pockets, accidentally finding the card that he hadn't thrown away. His feet stopped like they did every time he touched the thick, now crumpled paper. Slowly his arm withdrew, taking it out as he looked it over, reading it for the thousandth time. He didn't need to, he'd long since memorized the 10 digits on the card. No name was attached, but he knew who the phone call would reach.

After a moment of standing in the wind, biting his lip, he shook his head and shoved the card back in his pocket.

Never! He thought to himself. He would never...would he? Should he? He asked himself these questions every time...but this time was different. Had he finally reached the end of his rope? The end of his endurance? Here he was, barely able to sustain his human form, let alone his ghost form, homeless, jobless and more than a little depressed. He'd come here with such high hopes, but had figured out very early on that no one here wanted to be rescued as he'd once been so naive to think. He remembered when he had been innocent enough to believe that he could make it here...as a super hero.

But it didn't happen. Stupid comic books and childish dreams didn't come to life like he had imagined...or at all, really. People were afraid of him when he helped them, and he hated the looks they gave him. At least in Amity park they seemed to be more tolerant of him as a hero. Well, after the Ghost King incident in any case. Of course, he'd fought ghosts back then. Now, he lived in a city with no porthole, so few ghosts ever came this far. Actually, he hadn't met any. Sometimes, and ironically, he wished that one or two would show up. At least it would give him a way to vent his frustration.

His fingers stroked the card again, and he stopped again. So why did he stay and suffer like this? His family didn't want him, and the world didn't want him...but someone did...or they said they did...

He drew the card again from its sanctuary, and looked at it as if seeing it for the first time. His stomach growled with hunger. He'd definitely have plenty of food there. And a warm place to sleep. With the night coming up so quickly...even the homeless didn't want him hanging around. He scared them, and they didn't even know why...but he did.

For the first time in a long time, Danny slowly changed direction. How long had it been since he'd actually had a destination in mind? Normally he just wondered aimlessly, hoping for some way to come along that would allow him to survive. He felt his stomach growl. When was the last time he'd eaten? He couldn't remember that either. The hunger seemed to come and go, getting worse and worse as he went on without food.

He licked his lips, half in hunger half in nervousness, as he walked up to the gas-station's phone and picked up the receiver. He stood like that for several minutes, hesitating and wondering, before he finally placed the call collect. The one call he thought he would never make. It rang several times before it picked up.

"Vlad Masters speaking."
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Comments: 91

Obi-quiet In reply to ??? [2012-05-21 08:45:44 +0000 UTC]

No worries. You're not the only one who really liked it. I was in a pretty dark spot when I wrote this and it helped to get a lot of my frustration out.

Not afraid to torture my characters, huh? Yeah, about that...um...there are very few characters that I write about that I don't thoroughly torture. Most of them I just like seeing get better and overcoming hard things. Danny's one of them.

Thank you! I always appreciate the reviews.

If you want to see how much my writing style has changed, though, I have a Danny Phantom one-shot that I just wrote about Valerie called 'two and two'.

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XxAnimeWolfxX In reply to Obi-quiet [2012-05-21 19:26:09 +0000 UTC]

Not a problem! It's in the DP folder, right?

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Obi-quiet In reply to XxAnimeWolfxX [2012-05-21 22:15:03 +0000 UTC]

It should be. If not it's very recent. First page of my gallery.

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AlyPhantom [2006-06-27 14:48:08 +0000 UTC]

LOved it!

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Obi-quiet In reply to AlyPhantom [2006-06-27 14:56:58 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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HitokiriKurisuta [2006-03-15 13:45:08 +0000 UTC]

I feel sorry for Danny...But...HE'S JOINING VLAD!!! YE-EEEEES!!!

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Obi-quiet In reply to HitokiriKurisuta [2006-03-15 20:11:18 +0000 UTC]

AND YOU'RE HAPPY?!? *backs away slowly*

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HitokiriKurisuta In reply to Obi-quiet [2006-03-15 20:55:16 +0000 UTC]

I have a "slight" villain obsession...

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Obi-quiet In reply to HitokiriKurisuta [2006-03-15 23:38:51 +0000 UTC]

Hadn't noticed *sarcasm*

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HitokiriKurisuta In reply to Obi-quiet [2006-03-15 23:44:23 +0000 UTC]

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Obi-quiet In reply to HitokiriKurisuta [2006-03-15 23:46:28 +0000 UTC]

Warning: 7 out of the last 8 chapters of Magnified Reflection are rather cruel cliffhangers.

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HitokiriKurisuta In reply to Obi-quiet [2006-03-15 23:53:54 +0000 UTC]

^shrugs^ Oh, well. The whole thing is still posted, right? So it's not a problem.

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Obi-quiet In reply to HitokiriKurisuta [2006-03-15 23:58:06 +0000 UTC]

*shrug* Okay. I just like warning people. I like having an idea of what's coming up.

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HitokiriKurisuta In reply to Obi-quiet [2006-03-16 01:26:05 +0000 UTC]

^_^ Yeah, same here...
And, sorry...But which story comes after Mag. Ref.? I'm having to sort through your gallery and find which one's go with which time-line...
Actually, scratch that. I'll have probably found it by the time you answer this.

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ArtCrazedWitch [2006-01-12 01:02:13 +0000 UTC]

You make too many cliffhangers. ME HATE CLIFFHANGERS!!! Once in a while is okay, but you do it a lot so cut down on the cliffhangers or you will make me angry, and you won't like me when I'm angry...

~ArtCrazedWitch~

>>eople say "don't do today what you can put off 'til tomorrow", but what is today if not yesterday's tomorrow? Think about that.

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Obi-quiet In reply to ArtCrazedWitch [2006-01-12 04:06:18 +0000 UTC]

Sorry, but I'm addicted to writing evil cliffhangers. Sorry hon. You're gonna get them for a while yet. Once I get into Lost and Gained, and Weakness I'm a little better.

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ArtCrazedWitch In reply to Obi-quiet [2006-02-27 01:32:37 +0000 UTC]

Yes, well I simply hate cliffhangers. In 5th grade we had to write a 5 paragraph story at the end of the year and I turned it into a 9 CHAPTER story, then was forced to turn it into a cliffhanger, but after I handed it in I had to go back and keep expanding on it. Unfortunetly I'm still writing it 2 YEARS LATER!!!!

~ArtCrazedWitch~

>> People say "don't do today what you can put off 'til tomorrow", but what is today if not yesterday's tomorrow? Think about that.

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Obi-quiet In reply to ArtCrazedWitch [2006-02-27 15:48:49 +0000 UTC]

LOL! I actually find that funny. What's your story about?

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ArtCrazedWitch In reply to Obi-quiet [2006-04-14 19:50:27 +0000 UTC]

Well, it's called The Stone of Light and it can use some serious editing, but give me credit for only being in 5th grade. It is kinda like Harry Potter, but still different. Now that I think about it it is a lot like Harry Potter! *Hits head repeatedly on desk* But my teacher liked it, except for the fact that it was turned in late. Either way, I started on a new story called The Exchange Student. It may sound pretty normal, but it involves living in the future and traveling to an opposite dimension. I told gothicstarfire93 about it and she laughed so hard she started to cry and when I told her that it came to me in a dream, literally, she made a joke about how I should go back to sleep. She also said that she would illustrate it. One day I hapoe to get my work published!

~ArtCrazedWitch~

>> People say "don't do today what you can put off 'til tomorrow", but what is today if not yesterday's tomorrow? Think about that.

<< That isn't something I practice, but maybe you can!

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WingsofMorphius [2005-12-30 01:03:19 +0000 UTC]

Awww, poor Danny's just lookin' for some love! 'glomps'

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Obi-quiet In reply to WingsofMorphius [2005-12-30 01:26:31 +0000 UTC]

I'll give him a hug too. *hugs him*

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emberforever [2005-12-08 02:45:48 +0000 UTC]

noooooo!!!!!!! could this be happening!!!!!!!?

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Obi-quiet In reply to emberforever [2005-12-08 05:19:16 +0000 UTC]

You think I'm cruel here...you should read the next book...or the one I'm coming out with right now.

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emberforever In reply to Obi-quiet [2005-12-08 23:01:27 +0000 UTC]

hahaha
lol
it ok i hav a plan in the future of becoming an eveil dictator and killing everyone i dont like
top that......jk
but really i am

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Obi-quiet In reply to emberforever [2005-12-09 12:15:10 +0000 UTC]

*stares* Um...can't top that...I"m the sort of person that would stand aginst you.

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emberforever In reply to Obi-quiet [2005-12-09 22:47:34 +0000 UTC]

haha
yea
but thats only for my enemies
and the people that dont like me
lol
but i wont kill u ur one of the good guys

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Obi-quiet In reply to emberforever [2005-12-10 18:04:58 +0000 UTC]

Yay! I'm a good guy, so I dont' die! And would you know it? I'm a poet!

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emberforever In reply to Obi-quiet [2005-12-11 06:29:26 +0000 UTC]

yup

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Amourwolf [2005-07-25 03:16:40 +0000 UTC]

Awesome story , I'm going to read more ^_^
+faves
~Amourwolf

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Obi-quiet In reply to Amourwolf [2005-07-25 05:15:14 +0000 UTC]

Thanx hon!

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paradoxal [2005-01-06 01:30:10 +0000 UTC]

Sounds like a really promising (eek, poor Danny.. what's happened to him?) start. I'll have to check out the rest of this story!

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Obi-quiet In reply to paradoxal [2005-01-06 05:55:27 +0000 UTC]

Sorry to drag you into this...I really didn't have that intention.

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paradoxal In reply to Obi-quiet [2005-01-06 13:55:01 +0000 UTC]

Oh hey, that's fine.

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danni-2005 [2004-12-20 02:03:27 +0000 UTC]

Totally awesome. Loved it to death. Well, Obi, I'm off to read more.

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Obi-quiet In reply to danni-2005 [2004-12-20 03:15:45 +0000 UTC]

Aww, thanks! I must say, I am honored that such an amazing writer thinks I'm any good.

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danni-2005 In reply to Obi-quiet [2004-12-20 03:26:54 +0000 UTC]

The so-called good author thinks you rock her socks of and we need to co-write!

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danni-2005 In reply to danni-2005 [2004-12-20 03:34:12 +0000 UTC]

BUWAHAHA! I AM THE SUPERIOR ONE! BOW TO MY AWE-INSPIRING PLOTS! Just kidding. RML. I should delete that so you-know-who doesn't come after me for stealing her phrases but I don't feel like it.

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Obi-quiet In reply to danni-2005 [2004-12-20 03:28:59 +0000 UTC]

Hmmm...our opinions of each other match...interesting. Great minds think alike...even if yours is greater.

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danni-2005 In reply to Obi-quiet [2004-12-21 04:25:49 +0000 UTC]

Exactly. I am the superior intellect in this platonic relationship! Bow down before me and declare yourself a worm!

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Obi-quiet In reply to danni-2005 [2004-12-21 04:28:54 +0000 UTC]

Hmmm...no.

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danni-2005 In reply to Obi-quiet [2004-12-21 04:32:59 +0000 UTC]

Hmm...Yes.

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Obi-quiet In reply to danni-2005 [2004-12-21 04:33:50 +0000 UTC]

Sorry hon, not gonna happen. You're good, and maybe even worth worship, but I'm not the one to declair myself a worm.

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danni-2005 In reply to Obi-quiet [2004-12-21 04:35:36 +0000 UTC]

Aw. LoL. Have you ever read the children's book "Diary of a Worm"? Sorry I'm a children's Librarian. And it's my favorite.

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Obi-quiet In reply to danni-2005 [2004-12-21 04:36:10 +0000 UTC]

No, I haven't. What's it about?

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danni-2005 In reply to Obi-quiet [2004-12-22 22:28:30 +0000 UTC]

It's a first grade worm trying to figure out all life's little secrets in twenty pages.

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Obi-quiet In reply to danni-2005 [2004-12-23 05:59:03 +0000 UTC]

LOL!

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labpizza [2004-12-04 15:38:13 +0000 UTC]

WHOA! i actually read a story once in my life!! w00!! I think i might be reading more of this story in the future... do you suggest i read 'forced' first though?

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Obi-quiet In reply to labpizza [2004-12-04 17:09:05 +0000 UTC]

Nah. This story is completely indipendant of both "trapped" and "Forced Through". Those two only preclude my third one. This one is one that I just had to get out because I liked the idea.

Thanks!

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labpizza In reply to Obi-quiet [2004-12-04 17:33:46 +0000 UTC]

ooh! so im reading the wrong story to get up to the point where... 'evvvvil danny' is involved? hey i'm liking the sound of this story though, i'll read more when i can ^.^

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Obi-quiet In reply to labpizza [2004-12-04 17:34:39 +0000 UTC]

LOL! Thanks! Tis high praise, and I apprecate it. Hopefully you'll like all my other stories too. I only have two of them.

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