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SamBlob — Six word rhyming couplet
Published: 2011-01-31 17:21:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 262; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 1
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Description Her I see.
Now I flee!
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Comments: 6

BurningRoseBud [2011-04-13 14:48:32 +0000 UTC]

funny, it sound like a cartoon line, it reminded me of Full Metal Alchemist!

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SamBlob In reply to BurningRoseBud [2011-04-13 20:00:03 +0000 UTC]

Maybe something Edward would say if he saw Winry looking furious and carrying a big wrench?

Thank you.

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BurningRoseBud In reply to SamBlob [2011-04-14 17:42:24 +0000 UTC]

yeah, something like that

you're welcome

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3wyl [2011-02-03 19:16:27 +0000 UTC]

It doesn't give us much context/substance to work with, I have to say... but I like how you've left it open for our own interpretation and all.

Perhaps you could add in a few commas, but... yeah, it's not bad, the way it is right now.

Great rhythm to it. The brevity conveys how quick the fleeing was as well.

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SamBlob In reply to 3wyl [2011-02-07 00:33:16 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for your insightful comment.

Where would you suggest I put the commas?

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3wyl In reply to SamBlob [2011-02-07 20:40:00 +0000 UTC]

After the first word of each sentence.

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