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ScriptWeaver — From Tears to Dust
Published: 2011-09-21 22:11:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 189; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 1
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This world of ours was mine to rule,then stolen by the fates so cruel.
In exchange they gave me you,
told me you would love me true.
I never thought the fates would lie,
stabbed my heart and left to die.
You pulled my strings oh you were sly,
stained my soul with tears you'd cry.
All that's left is wicked lust,
as dried up tears then turn to dust.
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Thanks. Betrayal is one of my favorite things to toy with.
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same. Life is such an inspiration there. If you want to take a look, half of my poems are tinged with that stain.
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I've noticed. I love your poetry!
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Thank you. My poetry is quite fond of you as well.
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I dig this one. I like the first line in particular, as each person sets out to control their own lives, but then it seems that we are more often controlled by others, instead, and the way you've said it in those first two lines really sums it up perfectly, lovely.
The rest of the poems good, too, and couplets seem to work really well for this one. That's pretty cool.
Speaking of tears turning to dust, the ending actually reminds me of when I used to have my glasses. Sometimes I would cry and it would get spots all over my glasses that were always a pain in the ass to clean off, which I thought was strange because before that I hadn't realized that tears actually left residue.
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Lol I hate it when my glasses get all mucked up.
Wow thanks for the super feedback. I've never received such lengthy feedback on such a short work. Thank you!
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Not a problem. I try to be fairly lengthy when I can, because I know people generally appreciate a good, long comment at least every once in a while!
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They are very much appreciated thank you. I try to do right by my readers and every word they give is a blessing.
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Well thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. 
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Very nice! The tone and emotions were brilliantly presented, and the ryhming is just gorgeous. A beautifully dark poem. Love, love, love it!!
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Thanks. I'm glad you like it. I started with the last line of the poem and went from there. I really like the effect it had on the piece. Thanks again for the support. It thrills me to see people enjoy my poetry.
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Depressing is nice though and the ryhming is rather brilliant!!! Amazing job as always
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