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ScriptWeaver — Prologue to Blessed Shadow by-nc-nd
Published: 2011-05-18 22:48:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 342; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 7
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Description Stars. Atoms fuse, light is thrown, gravity shifts, time distorts, and the objects of space are cast in shadow.

A star was born, like all others, from a cloud of gas. It lived, as all stars do, consuming itself like a starving child, wasting away. Its existence was uneventful, unspectacular. But, as is sometimes the case, its death was catastrophic. In a flash, it disappeared. A blue ring expanded from its origin, a marked tombstone for the once magnificent star. Invisibly, radiation hurtles through space. Light years away a planet spins towards their eventual crossroads….

…1,347 years, 8 months, 23 days, 2 hours, 14 minutes, 39 seconds later…

… Dr. Riegn Striger of the Nazi party searched the heavens with his telescope. A missile of sweat hit the floor, launched by the Doctor's shaky hand. Hitler did not take failure well. Iron walls were closing in on the once glorious Third Reich. Their distraught leader had personally asked Striger to look to the skies, in search for a sign from God. So far, God remained silent.

He refocused the telescope on a near star, about twelve-hundred light years away. It struck him as odd, how a star larger than our own, gave our Earth such a little amount of light. He sighed and thought about his family deeper in Berlin. If I don't see something I'll never see them again. The thought chilled him and he concentrated harder on the star. Without warning the star disappeared into spontaneous eruption of light. Blinking once or twice he looked again through the small eyeglass.

        The star had vanished! It was replaced by a blue halo surrounding an angered purple heart of gas. He couldn't think straight for a moment. He was the first man ever to witness the death of a star so closely. He exhaled deeply, a sign at last for the Fuhrer.
A noise pierced the small room, it scratched at the air. The radiation monitor on the desk along the far wall was going berserk. "We've been hit!" The Dr. realized. All of his life he had researched radioactivity in space, now he knew that it indeed existed. He scrambled towards the door of the observatory to go inform his Fuhrer of the death of a once powerful star. He burst open the double doors hailing for his leader with great excitement. "My Hitler," he cried "my Fuhrer!"

The air screamed. Red clouded Striger's vision, he couldn't move, couldn't breathe, couldn't scream; all he could do was fall to the dry soil of the Earth and die…

…"Good shot Vladimir," a sturdy Russian hidden in the foliage whispered, "now Mother Russia moves to take Berlin, and end this plague of a war."
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Comments: 19

Doodelay [2011-12-09 03:31:36 +0000 UTC]

Excellent!

"…1,347 years, 8 months, 23 days, 2 hours, 14 minutes, 39 seconds later…" Got to love that brief, exacted description lol

"The star had vanished! It was replaced by a blue halo surrounding an angered purple heart of gas."

the angry purple won my heart THIS is story telling

mmmm gotta love it. much learned here, excellent piece my friend

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ScriptWeaver In reply to Doodelay [2011-12-09 03:34:37 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. And I learned much from your story too. I wish I could describe people like you do.

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SnoFox22 [2011-10-22 06:31:12 +0000 UTC]

Nice! A Great Improvement!

Looking forward to the next chapter!

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ScriptWeaver In reply to SnoFox22 [2011-10-22 17:02:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I might end up redoing chapter one as well before I submit chapter 9. I'm also making a Halloween story for Monday. So expect some exciting things to come!

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Kalypher [2011-10-21 02:51:54 +0000 UTC]

Was Dr. Reign Striger a real person?

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ScriptWeaver In reply to Kalypher [2011-10-21 02:54:46 +0000 UTC]

Lol sorry he's purely fictitious. Thanks though that means a lot. He's a character I made up. His great-grandson Dent Striger is a major antagonist in my book. I'm faltered.

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Kalypher In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-10-21 03:00:16 +0000 UTC]

Oh, hahaha, my bad. I'm glad you're flattered, at least. Hey, I'll look at some of your other stuff and tell you what I think if you'll check out some of my writing and lemme know what you think? Deal? c:

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ScriptWeaver In reply to Kalypher [2011-10-21 03:01:17 +0000 UTC]

Deal.

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Kalypher In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-10-21 03:01:53 +0000 UTC]

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XxSilentseerxX [2011-09-18 02:38:11 +0000 UTC]

Nice job! Hooks the reader and makes them want to read more! Awesome job!!!

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ScriptWeaver In reply to XxSilentseerxX [2011-09-18 02:42:02 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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XxSilentseerxX In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-09-18 02:47:39 +0000 UTC]

Anytime!!

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W-Lupus [2011-06-16 23:07:29 +0000 UTC]

Prologue is the correct term.

Well, this is a good solid start. The opening few scentences work very well, and in relation to the rest of the prologue as well. You are right, this is very short, so this comment is quite shorter than I thought. There are a one or two bits that can be re-worked. Consider whether the Bang is necessary. Think about how it reads if it is ommited. Creates drama, but the final line still tells you he's been shot.

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ScriptWeaver In reply to W-Lupus [2011-06-17 02:33:31 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I think your right about the "bang" thing.

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W-Lupus In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-06-17 09:13:09 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome.

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J-RavenEye [2011-05-19 09:57:57 +0000 UTC]

I think that a prologue is what sets the opinion of a reader for the rest of a story, and you have got made one that makes me look forward to the next upload!
It sounds like you described a gamma ray burst there, was that what you were after?

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ScriptWeaver In reply to J-RavenEye [2011-05-19 13:52:15 +0000 UTC]

Yep exactly, but they don't figure out its gamma rays until later.

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LightInMyMind [2011-05-19 02:16:18 +0000 UTC]

I do enjoy it. Implies the beginning to an interesting story. I do prefer prologue myself

Straight, not strait. Minor mispelling.

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ScriptWeaver In reply to LightInMyMind [2011-05-19 02:19:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!
(Spelling fixed.)

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