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Up on it's throne sat his brain, not in the least bit impressive, adorned with a powdered wig. Next to it but on an intentionally lower level, sat an eye witness. It had every right to be there as his eye had seen many things. It however, was noticeably nervous, darting it's focus around the room never leaving him for more than a few moments.On the opposite side of the judge (for the brain was a judge) hovered his pale and wiry hands. Anticipating the coming events the fingers danced and loosened over a dusty type-writer. His feet sat behind him, mute but lending their support. His hands however were quite cross and rest on the prosecutor's half of the courtroom. His mouth (for it was the mouth that took his defense) stilled itself beside him preparing for the coming clash.
His brain turned to his heart and asked, "is the Prosecution ready?" The heart mumbled a short agreement. "And the defense?" The mouth smiled slightly as he was fond of being addressed.
"Yes your honor," rolled off his tongue.
"And you," inquired the judge. "The jury of his tears?" A single tinkling voice rose in accordance. "Then we may begin. Prosecutor, your case?"
The heart stood up at once and was transparently giddy with excitement as he audibly pounded away. He spoke to his own beat. "The prosecution charges the defendant," he pointed directly at his soul and his cold formulaic words chilled it at once. Such cruelness from his own heart! "With numerous accounts of first degree murder, of which each individual case, (if the defendant is found guilty) is grounds for the death penalty."
He would have continued at his now rapid pace, if he had not been so rudely interrupted by the mouth. "Your honor if I may, I believe you forgot several key steps," he hissed coolly.
"Oh? And what might those steps be?" inquired the brain.
"Well," stated the mouth for he was confident this would be his swiftest victory yet, "of most significance is the defendants plea." The brain was ashamed and embarrassed instantly.
"Of course forgive me, and how does the defendant plead?"
"Not guilty your honor."
"Absurd!" cried the heart. "Your honor we have proof! No, damning proof that this man committed murder!" At this the mouth's smile spread wide, his sinister victory smile.
"Ah poor heart you didn't let me finish. The defendant pleads not guilty due to severe mental illness; he finds no wrong in it you see."
"Rubbish!" declared the heart. "Your honor how can you stand sun a bold faced affront to your courtroom?" The brain however seemed less concerned that the hear thought he ought to be.
"Prosecutor settle yourself. I find I am in agreement with the defendant's claim." This was too much for his foolish heart and it now raced uncontrollably.
"You're ill! All of you ill! This man deserves to be promptly hanged!" The mouth gave way to a muffled chuckle. He had not dreamed of such a crushing victory.
"See? You admit it yourself, you a poor fool's heart, his is indeed quite ill. Perhaps even mad." At this final word the rest of the courtroom burst into boisterous laughter..
This frightened the heart tremendously, to a point of near delirium. "No, no! I shan't believe it! How could this have happened? No!"
"Silence fool!" roared the brain. "How does the jury find?" Every tinkling, maniacal voice of the rears proclaimed in a chorus, "not guilty!" with such a force that the heart was finally silenced.
"Then," ceremoniously proclaimed the brain, "this court is adjourned." Happily chattering among themselves, every part of him left the room, save the heart, his heart. Defeated for a final time, it slunk into a corner and trembled, and would remain so for the rest of his life.
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Comments: 14
SnoFox22 [2012-01-15 10:36:29 +0000 UTC]
Wow, this is very good. It wasn't too hard to follow and I loved the way you made a court case resemble someone's likeness (or maybe it's the other way around.)
Anyway, good job! I hope you manage to get it published!
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ScriptWeaver In reply to SnoFox22 [2012-01-15 17:58:25 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. I'll probably re-work it myself but this is just a rough outline. Thanks a bunch!
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rioza [2011-12-26 03:53:56 +0000 UTC]
Wow. One of the most interesting things I've read in a while.
Firstly, I love the layers you used here. They really inspire a lot of thought. For instance, one of the things that really caught me was "The jury of his tears?" Which made me realize that we were not simply personifying the parts of any old courtroom-- that this was more of an introverted trial. And that the jury might actually be his tears and (please do correct me if I'm wrong) they, hmm, support or at least help the brain delude himself of his case. At first, I will admit I was a little confused, but once I got my mind wrapped around the storyline it all became really clear. Incredibly done I'd say. Like I said-- it really inspires some delicious thought. :]
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ScriptWeaver In reply to rioza [2011-12-26 06:23:26 +0000 UTC]
Ha! You hit it right on the nose! He's under a kind of self trial. I'll have to rewrite it to make it more clear but I like the idea of having body parts argue.
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rioza In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-12-27 00:04:14 +0000 UTC]
Yes, it's a n extremely interesting idea. I hope it becomes published one day.~
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ScriptWeaver In reply to rioza [2011-12-27 00:05:58 +0000 UTC]
Thanks , I really have no idea where I'm going with it yet though. It's kind of a discover the story as I write type deal.
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rioza In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-12-27 04:36:36 +0000 UTC]
Well, that's the way a lot of professional writers go.
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ScriptWeaver In reply to rioza [2011-12-27 04:39:52 +0000 UTC]
Aww gee thanks Mace. That means a lot.
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J-RavenEye [2011-12-23 12:56:48 +0000 UTC]
I find this a little bit confusing, but that is probably because this is only a small piece. I hope you get this published, if you do I will look out for it
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ScriptWeaver In reply to J-RavenEye [2011-12-23 14:59:21 +0000 UTC]
Yeah sorry, it's confusing as hell now that I reread it. I'll probably end up rewriting it. Thanks for the support.
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J-RavenEye In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-12-23 15:34:53 +0000 UTC]
I found the way you made the body parts in a court interesting, don't think I have seen that before
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ScriptWeaver In reply to J-RavenEye [2011-12-23 23:29:37 +0000 UTC]
Yeah I kinda wanted it to resemble a self trial. Don't know how well I did though. Oh well, practice makes perfect.
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J-RavenEye In reply to ScriptWeaver [2011-12-25 05:03:07 +0000 UTC]
I understood that it was a self trial, it seems the person managed to convince himself that he didn't do something, at least not intentionally
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ScriptWeaver In reply to J-RavenEye [2011-12-25 21:16:00 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. I'll still have to rewrite it though. I appreciate the feedback immensely!
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